The internet- is it good or bad ?

Since the late 20th century, the Internet has revolutionized our lives. The Internet has become a significant factor in (the) economic and cultural development and constitutes the globalization. Also, there is no doubt the Internet affected our lives, for better, and for worse.

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As I mentioned before, the Internet has quite a lot of advantages. On the one hand, it contributes the advanced human(phr.) in many ways. It allows us, the human being(s), accessible sources of information, which helps our education. In addition, it is used as an easy way of modern communication, because people can talk by computer, by immediately(ww.) messages. Moreover, for the business people between(ww. - among) us, it is excellent for an accessible(phr.) work at home.
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On the other hand, however, the Internet has a few disadvantages. There are a lot of dangers, especially for children, such as uncontrolled material, dangerous people who try to tempt innocent children (pedophiles), etc. In addition, teenagers mainly, waste their time sitting in front of the computer, instead of doing sport activity(gr. - use the plural form), meeting friends, and studying. They are just sitting(gr.) in front of computer, activating their fingers mainly. In addition, is harm(gr.) their social abilities beacause they do not see their friends face to face, they do not talk to them directly.

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In conclusion, we can say the Internet has changed our lives in both a positive and a negative way. Inspite of the risks I have mentioned before, I think that the Internet is a positive invention, that helps us a lot in this technologic generation. Moreover, in my opinion, we can still fix the situation and take care of the children using the internet, by blocking the entrance to inappropriate sites.

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Daphna

Students get involved in their communities

Nowadays, we can see that fewer teenagers are involved in social activities, that are related to the community and helping the society. In my opinion, there are some ways to cause students to become more involved in their communities.

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First, there is a possibility to bring some people to talk about the importance of being involved in the community. I believe that if someone talks about the infinite possibilities to help the society, every student will find something that he likes and is attracted to.

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Moreover, in my school for example, there is a program called "Mechuyavut Ishit". The idea of the program is to make pupils volunteer in their communities for two years in high school. Without volunteering they could(ww. - can) not get their Bagrut certificate. It may sound a little silly to "force" those pupils to volunteer, but actually, most teenagers find they enjoy it and some of them even continue volunteering for fun.

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In conclusion,there are a few ways to cause students to be more involved in their communities. Any person, and especially a teenager, can find an activity that he really enjoys and also help other people by volunteering in his community.

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Much better. Well done.

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Daphna