Each of us has a different peronality, different qualities, different ambitions and so on. We all look for different qualities in our best friend. Some of us look for the most popular at school, the funniest, or the smartest, but in my opinion, there are some extremely important qualities in a friend, especially for me.
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For me, one of the most important qualities in a friend is the ability to listen and be there for you. I expect from my friend to hear me and help me when I need him, like the way I would do for him. Secondly, the loyalty. I think that it is very important that your friend will not go and tell everybody your secrets (phr. - doesn't share your secrets and private thoughts with others) and the thoughts you share with him. One more very important thing, is to be a person that I feel comfortable with (phr. - Your friend should also be someone you are the most comfortable with) -You listed all the qualities without expalining why they are important.You should add an explanation to each quality you have chosen to make the reader understand why you have chosen it.
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These qualities are so important for some reasons. first of all, if your friend is not able to listen, and help you when you need him- he is not a friend. In addition, someone that can not have(ww. keep) a secret is an(מיותר) unreliable, and no one wants to be a friend of somone like this.
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To conclude, There is no doubt that anyone(ww. - everyone) has its(ww. - his) own requirement(s) that he looks (for) in a friend , but I think I have named the most important (ones). - Not enough as a conclusion. Why are those you've chosen the most important? You have to state the main points of your arguument.
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I think I explained very clearly what needs to be done to make your essay better. When you choose to write about a quality, you have to write the explanation why it is importatnt to have this quality in a friend next to it. Also, you conclusion is one sentence. You have to think what should be written in a clonclusion. Remember you always have to first state the main arguments, in short.
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